мне не очень, честно говоря
I would like to apply for the Project Manager position that you recently advertised on stepstone.de.
<>если recently, то present perfect и предложение слишком стандартное
I have recently graduated from the University of Applied Science (Х) with a M.A. degree in International Tourism Management.
->finished , два раза recently не гут
In addition, I am working in the marketing department at SAP CRM consulting М.
->Currently,... (но не понятно, если ты там уже работаешь и только закончила, зачем ищешь?)
Thanks to this work, I have gained first experience in marketing, sales and customer relationship management.
My master thesis I wrote on the topic “CRM at medium-sized tourism enterprises”.
-> прыжок опять к учебе, компонуй предложения про учебу вместе
предложение неправильно построено в приципе и главное, что оно говорит? Within my master thesis "xxxx", I ...(что делала, что выучила), имя работы можно и не писать, он есть в CV?
By studying design in Minsk, I have shown that I am good in implementing my own creative ideas.
тоже я лично не понимаю смысл
Besides being fluent in german, I am a native speaker of russian and have good language skills in english.
English, Russian, ... всегда с большой буквы
I believe that with my natural diplomacy and interpersonal skills, my business expertise and experience in the field of Customer Relationship Management, I am the perfect candidate for your opening.
Please find enclosed my CV, which details my career history to date, along with information about other professional and linguistic qualifications. For further information, please feel free to contact me at anytime. I greatly appreciate your interest and am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
последний абзац явно откуда-то, разу видно.
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в общем очень похоже на пересказ CV, а что именно ты делала - нигде не стоит. или вообще в чем доп инфа данного cover letter?